很多小伙伴們都很迷茫作文到底要怎樣寫才能到8分，甚至很大一部分烤鴨們覺得自己的作文能寫到7分就已經(jīng)到達極限，要謝天謝地了。小編要告訴大家，其實真的沒有那么難哦!~ 只要用詞得當，邏輯清晰，不跑題不偏題，寫作8分不是夢~
今天51要給大家分享一篇無考官批改的8分作文，各位親愛的小伙伴們在欣賞8分美文的同時，還可以看看考官是如何批改作文的哦!~
Task2: Ambition is an important characteristic of people. How important is it for people to make success in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic for success?
Ambition is the desire (Nice definition of ambition) for accomplishment, and it is widely believed that ambitious people are likely to succeed precisely because they have the internal drive to achieve their goals. In my opinion, although being ambitious is important to make a success out of life, it brings people both benefits and disadvantages (In English we usually pair ‘advantages and disadvantages’ and ‘benefits and drawbacks’).
開頭簡潔明了，用ambition的定義展開這個話題~ 既自然又能妥妥的直切主題!~ 接著回答題目中的兩個問題：盡管一個人有沒有野心對成功很重要，但是野心也是一把雙刃劍。僅僅是一個開頭，無憂小雅哥&悉尼雅思姐就要給這位小伙伴點個zan啦，在開頭段寫Introduction和answer the question才是這類題型最正確的寫法!~
Having a sense of ambition helps people establish clear goals, and motivates them to make a sincere effort towards achieving their target. For example, students who aspire to become lawyers in the future have to be highly motivated to study hard because most law schools have high academic entry requirements. Also, ambition drives (good) people to make optimal use of their available resources, such as time and money, because these resources are scarce. People must therefore make choices between different things that they can do, and definitely choose to do those things that will achieve their personal goals first. For instance, many geniuses, such as Bill Gates and Steve Jobs, quit their universities to start their own businesses at an early age because time is precious and they chose to allocate it to their career vision.
主體第一段寫了兩個方面，一個是野心能夠使人擁有明確的目標，并且為這個目標而努力，并舉法學院學生的這個例子證明自己的觀點。第二個方面是野心能夠讓人很好的利用可用的資源，比如時間和金錢，并舉了Bill Gates和Steve Jobs的例子來充分的說明他們雖然年紀輕輕就輟學，但是他們很好的利用這一段時間來開創(chuàng)他們的事業(yè)~ 童鞋們可以仔細看看考官的批改，所有的語法錯誤，用詞錯誤 ，不得當?shù)谋磉_都被考官一一指出并加以糾正，這一直都是無憂雅思辦學的宗旨，真真正正的幫助烤鴨們了解自己的錯誤并給予指導!~
However, it is not true that the desire for success is all positive. Ambition may be positive or negative depending on a person’s specific situation. Setting an unrealistic goal may be a waste of time and passion, and sometimes such goals may mislead people. For example, some people want to become billionaires in a short time. Actually, only a few people in the world can achieve this success, and the rest may eventually have to give up their dreams and sacrifice their efforts and capital which were(I changed the verb to the plural form because both effort and capital are invested) invested in this ambition. Also, in order to achieve the impossible dream, some dreamers may seek illegal opportunities to earn a huge profit such as selling drugs.
一個However就能指出這一段與上一段持相反的觀點，那么這一段的主旨一定是野心所帶來的影響不都是好的。一個不實際的野心或者夢想反而會浪費人的時間和精力。更甚者，為了達到某些不實際的幻想，有些人可能會做出一些違法的行為。
In conclusion, ambition does make a contribution to people’s success but it is the goal which suits the specific situation that is likely to produce positive outcomes.
結尾段重申自己的觀點，野心確實能拉近人們和成功之間的距離，但是必須是某些特定的目標才能產(chǎn)生積極的效應。
你以為作文批改到這里就結束啦?并沒有哦!!!壓軸戲通常都在后頭呢!~根據(jù)雅思寫作4項評分標準(TR & CC & LR & GRA)分別打分和提供評語哦!~ 這樣烤鴨們就能看出自己哪一項是比較薄弱的，就可以在這一項上多下點功夫，只有找對了方向，才好使勁哦!~
TASK RESPONSE： 8
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
Presents a well-developed response to the question with relevant, extended and supported ideas.
By the way, the most commonly perceived downside of ambition is that it can make people ruthless where they want to succeed at any price. For example they neglect their personal relationships. They may also not be interested in helping other people much because they have eyes only for their own goals. So ambition can make people very self-centred and egotistical.
COHERENCE & COHESION： 8
• Sequences information and ideas logically
• Manages all aspects of cohesion well
• Uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately
LEXICAL RESOURCE ：7-8
• Uses a wide range of vocabulary fluently and flexibly to convey precise meanings
• Occasional errors in word choice
GRAMMAR：8
• Uses a wide range of structures
• The majority of sentences are error free
• Makes only occasional errors
看了這篇8分作文，小伙伴們是不是也覺得8分并沒有那么遙不可及呢!~ 只要童鞋們肯努力肯花時間一定可以做到的!
